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. REFLECTED . by ~kittykittyhunter:iconkittykittyhunter:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Song


You think I see the world
Between the shards of jaded eyes
Such a delusion
You think it takes your hand
To change the things that plague my heart
Mistake emotions

How can you be the one
To rid me of my nightmares?
Why can’t you understand
That I long for the dreams I had?
Look past the rising sun
It falls not on the wayside
I’ve learnt to live within the frame

Why should I try to see
That side of you reflected?
And if there’s something wrong
Why should I stare and guess it?
You treat me as your shield
you don’t face
your own demons
it’s not that hard to rise and fight

Throw down your pride
Stand on your feet and live tonight
Don’t hide behind
The feelings you inflict on me
Believe in you
And nothing else needs to be said

But I don’t need you here
to cleanse me of the darkness
You need to face the world
and rip through all its shadows

I never want to see
All of your pains reflected
It is the side of you
I always have rejected
One day you’ll understand you’ve never been neglected
Someday you’ll realise you’ve always been protected

You are your brighter side
©2008-2009 ~kittykittyhunter
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Part Two to This Side Reflected [link] Credit for this idea goes to the lovely, annoying, adorable, orange-peel-consuming, violent and insane :devwhowantsto-know:, aka, Shishidina. (Not that I’m too sure she’ll be flattered by my description of her… :XD: don’t kill me!!!) The original poem was written for the perspective of a male, now I’ve twisted it so that it’s from the girl’s POV. This was the story for the original:

He always witnesses one of his friend’s going through various dilemmas, but he’s there to support her. She thinks that things are a lot worse than they actually are; this is him ‘venting’ his frustration at her refusal to see how he’s there for her. Now basically, he’s trying to express that she can count on him.

HOWEVER, in her eyes, he uses her as a distraction for his own problems, never facing his own issues because he’s too busy trying to protect her. As can be seen, she’s frustrated at him, and wants him to stand up and fight-o! :w00t:

It follows the same tune/rhymes as the first one. It was really hard to write without singing, but I was in the school library so… ^^;

Hope you like it hunny. ;)

(I'd love to write some sort of story to it...)
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~shadowkaru15:iconshadowkaru15: May 20, 2008, 11:20:53 AM
And i love poem like this^^ You know with a story within! Nice work!

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<3 show some love, buy a tree xD
~kittykittyhunter:iconkittykittyhunter: May 21, 2008, 5:56:24 AM
:D Thank you hunny!

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yuujyou wa kokoro no chuugi

~ The heart’s loyalty is friendship.
~kittykittyhunter:iconkittykittyhunter: May 21, 2008, 5:56:44 AM
:glomp: Just thought I'd show you it. Cheers!

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yuujyou wa kokoro no chuugi

~ The heart’s loyalty is friendship.
~shadowkaru15:iconshadowkaru15: May 22, 2008, 8:48:47 AM
^^ :hug: you welcome!

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<3 show some love, buy a tree xD
~WhoWants-ToKnow:iconWhoWants-ToKnow: May 29, 2008, 6:25:58 PM
Lol. I loved the 'fight-o!' At the end there. Reminds me of Higa chuu. :3
Great job. :salute: It goes perfectly with the original.
I was thinking that, as well. It would make an awesome oneshot, or even if you'd continue it. ^^
I Like the last verse, and the line following. :3
Great job! ^^

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"Pigeon, winged cloak of grey, in the city's hellish maw. One glance and you fly away.. your grace holds me in awe."
~kittykittyhunter:iconkittykittyhunter: Jun 6, 2008, 8:25:21 AM
:XD: You're determined to get me to continue dedicating my time to this. :lol: I was actually thinking that when I wrote it though - it would be fun to do as a oneshot.

Hey~ Seigaku say "Fight-o!" a lot more than Higa do :XD:

:) Thanks.

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yuujyou wa kokoro no chuugi

~ The heart’s loyalty is friendship.
~WhoWants-ToKnow:iconWhoWants-ToKnow: Jun 6, 2008, 3:23:55 PM
That's true, but it reminds me of HIGA ANYWAY. >O

Higaisweicooleranyway.

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"Pigeon, winged cloak of grey, in the city's hellish maw. One glance and you fly away.. your grace holds me in awe."
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